Physically attractive, conceptually flawed
While the technical aspects were excellently done, and a lot of time was put into the details and artwork of the world, the storyline, or lack thereof, was unbelieveable and poorly implemented. I mean, yes, you were trying to present a simplified and futuristic look at the classic Aladdin storyline. You did that. But you did it badly and with little thought to the actual details and fleshings of a good story. As an artistic example it was very nice, and your skill is obvious, but as to your ability to tell a tale you leave much to be desired. A few simple examples, why exactly was someone so revered so badly guarded? Why did the protagonist care so much about her death when they spent a single afternoon together? Why would the three muggers be so quick to kill her when she was someone of importance? About the only thing storyline-wise you did very, very well was the moment with the water, it spoke droves about the type of world the story took place in and the mindset of its inhabitants. The rest was a jumble of concepts and ideas which weren't explored well enough, even for the short length of the animation. I can only call this average.
That was just stupid.
I'm not even going to bother reviewing the "plot" of this thing, because it was adverted as something that sounded interesting, and ended up being a music video.
The graphics were sub-par. Was the main character SUPPOSED to be a hunchback, or was that just shitty art? Stylisticly, I suppose it takes SOME style to create this with a straight face and not take a few jabs, but not enough to make it good.
Look, you tried, yeah. But it's not that great. You bring up points which are moot because they were created as part of FANTASY. You make connections which could've been made at any point in time, with any group of people. That, and how the HELL do you explain the main character surviving a several kiloton bomb going off, based on your perspective, a few feet away?
Nothing bad, nothing good.
Go to a site called "Modern Firearms" and look up the Sturmgewehr and the AK-47. Maybe they're superficially similar, but what you drew in the flash was still an AK-47.
I liked the flash, though I agree that the music didn't fit the action, even if it fit the "theme".
what I drew was a sturmgewehr, I drew it from an actual picture. please stfu dumbass.
I still think it's funny...
...and I was the first person to hear about it. Despite what the name says, I'm the Mentor she's refering to. I agree with most of you that the sound quality needs some work, but it's mostly to blame on the compression used and the fact that the mic used for my parts is a digital voice recorder with a sub-par microphone. The graphics are some of the best I've seen Nalem do, though not THE best. I do think it should get frontpage-ed, though...
Oh, and the guy, earlier, who commented on my voice. Shall we hear yours, perchance? I love the conclusions you drew, by the way. Wonderful logic you must have used.
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